In 2015 I received an institutional action because a fellow student and I stole some wine from an open closet. I have written a description of the incident and would like some feedback please.
"One evening during my sophomore year of college I and my friend were walking through the student union when we noticed an open closet door with two bottles of wine in brown bags. We foolishly decided to take the wine ourselves. The next day the Office of Student Conduct contacted us and informed us that the wine belonged to a local church. We promptly confessed and offered our sincere apologies to the pastor. The Office of Student Conduct and the pastor were both quite gracious and accepted our apology and gave us fair punishments. We were mandated to write the church a sincere letter of apology, attend alcohol training, perform community service, and compensate the church for the cost of the wine. I take full responsibility for this event and am embarrassed by my poor decision to take the wine. While this event was in poor judgment, it also proved to be a valuable learning experience that taught me to think before I act and to deal with stressful situations. I maintained exemplary conduct afterward and graduated with no further problems."
"One evening during my sophomore year of college I and my friend were walking through the student union when we noticed an open closet door with two bottles of wine in brown bags. We foolishly decided to take the wine ourselves. The next day the Office of Student Conduct contacted us and informed us that the wine belonged to a local church. We promptly confessed and offered our sincere apologies to the pastor. The Office of Student Conduct and the pastor were both quite gracious and accepted our apology and gave us fair punishments. We were mandated to write the church a sincere letter of apology, attend alcohol training, perform community service, and compensate the church for the cost of the wine. I take full responsibility for this event and am embarrassed by my poor decision to take the wine. While this event was in poor judgment, it also proved to be a valuable learning experience that taught me to think before I act and to deal with stressful situations. I maintained exemplary conduct afterward and graduated with no further problems."